@naughtyTechnician ZORRY THIZ IZ WHAT I HAVE FOR NOW ALZO @conzequentlyOblique I HATE HOW YOU GUEZZED IT WAZ ABT YOU TOO FUCK YOU TAGZ: #NZFW #ZUGGEZTIVE #CNC?? #IMPLIEDPAILING (ONLY IMPLIED FOR NOW) DIZ IZ ZO CRINGY I WANNA DIE UGH OK WHATEVER ------ It waz a boring evening. Kryquz had nothing to do, he waz bored out of hiz pan. He opened hiz huzktop and went on chittr for a while. He zcrolled, commented, pozted. Az uzual. Until he heard zomething unexpected. A knock at the door of hiz hive? Ztrange. He wazn’t expecting any gueztz today, zo who could it be? He thought, before getting up and opening the door. It waz none other than Phuntr. “Hey, azzhole.” “…Phuntr?” Kryquz raized an eyebrow. Why Phuntr, out of all people? “You owe me 20 caegarz.” “Ooh. Right. Well I doon’t have, uh, any, right noow. Can i pay yoou later?” “u’RE alwayz zaying that…you know what? I can dizmizz your debt.” Phuntr then leaned in and whizpered againzt Kryquz’ ear. “ You can pay me…in a different way…” The wordz zent a chill down Kryquz’ zpine. He couldn’t pozzibly be zuggezting that…could he? He knew it waz wrong, that he zhould juzt back away and tell him to fuck off, but. At the zame time, a part of him kind of wanted it. He’z thought about it zeveral timez, zeveral lightz, juzt praying for the day he finally got the chance to pail with him. “uh, yoou knoow what, zure.” He nodded and let him in hiz hive. Phuntr let out a quiet chuckle. “good boy.” The compliment left Kryquz in awe, and he could feel hiz face warming up ever zo zlightly. Zuddenly, Phuntr grabbed him by the chin and planted a zmall, gentle kizz on Kryquz’ lipz. He pulled away before he could even react. “hnn, doon’t be cooy.” Kryquz zaid and kizzed him back, thiz time it waz a longer and more pazzionate kizz. Phuntr reciprocated it immediately. UHHHHHHHHH NOPE NOPE OK 10 LIKEZ FOR PART 2
LMAOOO XAXAXAXAXAXA WAT BUT ITZ GENUINE TRAZH WYM
it was a joke i'd never find kryqus hot but pleathe write a part 2
ZORRY ITZ ONLY AT 5 LIKEZ I CANG WRITE A PART 2 YET
CANT*
some commentary. i would not great him with "hey asshole". just "hey." would suffice. you'RE doing a little too much. on top of that, i would also not call kryqus good boy, i would say "good pony." you also seem to have ignored the fact that kryqus is not a good kisser, something that really takes me out the believability of this encounter. you also do not do much to evoke the scene. what kryqus and i are doing, our body language - the only real description of action comes from the kissing and really takes away from the passion of it all. what are my hands doing? how is my body angled? it feels more like someone playing with dolls than it does a lustful encounter. i hope you can take this criticism away to improve your future writings.
Toough talk foor soomeoone whoo was soo eager too kiss me
Literally coouldn't pull yoou away froom my lips
>>| fascinating. taking notes there.